Neon Yang

Brighter than Scale, Swifter than Flame

great concept, disappointing execution. I love love the idea of this novella, but I think it would have been better executed as a novel; it felt rushed and sometimes confusing timeline wise. for example, our main character is sent to train as a dragon hunter at 13, and then it just says many years later and then the plot begins, but like, how many years later? how old is our protag? how old is the love interest, who’s really only frame of reference that I remember in terms of age is that she is called the girl-king, so she must be still young. how long was our protag there in the city before the incident at the end? their love story felt rushed because there was no emotional build up to it. there are quite a few other instances besides timeline problems where I thought this novella would have benefited from a little more workshopping to flesh it out into a full novel. I think making it longer would be the only way to do the storyline justice. that said, I enjoyed the characters and the worldbuilding, and I think the writing itself was very strong. I would read more from this author for sure!

fris🐝

I think I would have preferred this as a novel rather than a novella

Sivani

It was a great concept, but this definitely did not work as a novella in my opinion. It would have been better fleshed out as a full novel. 

There’s a lot of telling instead of showing, and the pacing and character development suffers for it. 

Floofyflower

It was a great concept, but this definitely did not work as a novella in my opinion. It would have been better fleshed out as a full novel. 

There’s a lot of telling instead of showing, and the pacing and character development suffers for it. 